Open to Criticism.

I love writing, and video games are often the subject of my writing. I've been trying to write reviews for a couple months now, but they have mostly just been streams of consciousness written in about ten minutes with absolutely no editing. For my latest review, I tried to make it more professional by taking notes, and actually looking through it at the end instead of just hitting submit and forgetting about it. That being said, I'm not going to be some sort of Shakespeare at 15, so I'm looking for people to read it and give me feedback. I'm not just trying to shamelessly advertise my review, I'm just trying to improve my writing. And I'm sure many of you are experienced in reading reviews, so I thought you guys would be way better help than my parents or my teachers, who would have no idea what the hell I'm talking about. So, if anyone could kindly read the review here. I'm still trying to work out the perfect length, as my original draft was about 1 500 words long, and this version may be a bit short. As I said in the title, I'm open to criticism, so pick it to pieces if you really want to!