My Posts: Help required

Well so far giantbomb is proving a worthy home for Jeff and co, and I am hoping it will be for me as well. I am wanting to improve my review writing and editorial/blog posts, but no one ever seems to read and comment on them with constructive criticism. I hope that this new site with new people will help me with this, all I ask is a few comments on how I write if you have any thoughts on where it might need improvement.

you never know, Jeff, Ryan, Vinny and Brad may even help out, but I appriciate those guys are busy!